Authors Note: This story is of my own creation. When I saw the map by Tom Gauld I immediately thought of nuclear fallout and how people would survive and what would happen after thousands of years under the surface. I used mine shafts, nuclear fallout, and evil spirits to make a lot of what is going on in my heroines world. Mine shafts seemed to be the perfect home for nuclear survivors because it would keep them safe from radiation. The Nuclear Fallout would be the perfect cataclysm to change human way of thought and life while also keeping some aspects from the 1950's like the implementation of Nuclear families and the like. If you need any more information on nuclear families I did include a link and a picture to explain. The evil spirits were a perfect machine to deliver fear to my heroine and are actually in fact radiation clouds in my mind. All of these elements made this piece a blast to write. I hope you enjoy it!
She should have obeyed the laws of
the tribe. For thousands of years her people had hidden from the horrors of the
surface world. In a small shack in the wood is where her ancestors had made
their home tunneling deep into the earth after they had reached the end of
tunnels already built to mine the precious jewels that the ancient peoples
valued. Never did they go to the surface. The surface meant death to all things
and had been sealed off since the beginning. A fireball heated their life from
within the earth. Glowing crystals and glow worms littered the walls keeping
them from infinite darkness. This was her home. This was her ancestors home.
She
had left the tunnels by accident at first finding the first home. It was a tiny
room made of wood and stone. Everything was filmed with dust and covered in
cobwebs. It was awe inspiring. This was her beginning. This was where her people
had come from. This small room with no glow worms or crystals to light it. This
was hers to share or hers to keep all for herself and so she did. She kept the
room to herself visiting often and tracing the strange markings on the wall.
Tracing long forgotten words of the ancients. She tried sounding them out at
times but mostly traced them learning their curves better than she knew the
tunnels. Spending hours she would feel them in the darkness.
N U C
L E A R F A L L O U T S H E L T E R\
One day she was laying in her
hideaway and she heard a noise. She went to the wall and pressed her ear
against it. She heard something clawing at the outside. It startled her making
her crawl back huddling against the wall and before she could stop herself she
ran back into the tunnels and all the way to her assigned hole. Her birth giver
was there and noticed that her progeny was distressed. In a language much
altered from modern day English they spoke.
“What is wrong? Was there a tunnel
collapse?” Her birth giver placed her hands on the girl’s cheeks and looked into
her eyes questioningly. The girl thought for a moment licking her dried lips.
She wasn’t ready to give up her secret place to the others of the tribe.
“Nothing birth giver. I was scared
of something in the darkness.” She smiled reassuringly and patted her birth
givers hand. In the tribe there were rules to how many could occupy the hole.
One male birth giver and one female birth giver who in turn would produce one
male and one female progeny. Any other offspring were distributed to those who
could not or were not allowed to reproduce due to mutations from being under
the earth. These were rules set by the ancients and kept sacred by her people.
“You
are too old to still fear the darkness. Go and pray to the ancients to give you
courage. This is our life until our Holiday is ended by the ancients return or
the dying of the heat core.” Her birth giver was impatient with her as she
approached the time in which she would have her own hole and assigned a male
birth giver to spawn with. With that in mind she decided to figure out what had
made that noise. She had courage. She did not want to settle into her hole and
her future without knowing what had made that noise. She would venture outside
the stone and wood walls and see for herself.
The
next day she went back to her hideaway. There was a panel in the shape of her
hand next to cut out in the wall she pressed her hand to it and instantly
jerked it away. Blood ran from her finger and a soft beep sounded from the
panel and the door opened. She stepped through and was blinded by the sun. She
quickly put her arms over her eyes but it would not stop the light. It went
through her pale skin and burned her eyes blinding her. She fell backwards into
the room and the door hissed closed and she cried softly. Now she was afraid.
Her world was dark permanently the light had blinded her. In her eternal
darkness her hand felt around and felt the curved lines and was comforted. She
would never leave the tunnels and would warn her children of the danger. The
evil spirits that float through the air in dark green clouds that her birth
giver had told her about had taught her a lesson by blinding her. If they had
found her outside the tunnels on the surface they would have crawled into her
lungs and killed her. She left the small room and never went back but never
forgot the lesson taught to her.
(Nuclear Family)
(Glow Worms in a cave)
Bibliography:
This story is based on the map by Tom Gauld titled "Map of the Area Surrounding our Holiday Home."
Ooo this is interesting. I'm kinda curious to see what would happen if she tried to go out there again. It sounds like a good kicking off point for a longer story. This sounds like you really like writing and that you put a lot of effort into this short story here. I'm interested to see what else you write.
ReplyDeleteI really like the beginning of your story. You made it suspenseful and dramatic, which sets up the tone you are trying to convey. It really reflects the darkness that comes with thinking/discussing nuclear issues. It also has this mix of “The Host” by Stephenie Meyer and “The Giver” by Lois Lowry. You really set up the tone for a post-apocalyptic world and that’s a great accomplishment. There are a few things, though, that I wouldn’t mind being fleshed out a tad more. Maybe if you choose portfolio you will get that opportunity! For example, the bit about the birth giver. Is the birth giver chosen is there a particular job that this person is supposed to do, do they prevent the younger tribe members from finding something out? It really has great potential! Please, please pleassee continue writing this story!
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